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Old April 7, 2010, 05:32 PM   #5 (permalink)
Hay'aan Malinconico
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Really picky editing stuff first!

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As sinister as the idea of manipulating the minds of others seems, Dreamwalking - along with the similar arcanic skill of Mysticism - is largely misunderstood and is largely used for positive purposes.
There's two largelys in that sentence. I'd go with 'is often misunderstood and is, in fact, largely used for positive purposes'

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This means that magic as most people understand it cannot function. Instead, a mage can 'imagine' creating a fireball, causing the surrounding Dream Essence to morph into, ready for use.
Should be something like.... A mage can 'imagine' creating a fireball, causing the surrounding Dream Essence to morph into one, ready for use


The Plane of Dreams - when starting to read that, I was wondering how I got there? Maybe a little bit of explanation there?

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However, the true potency of names is derived from a Dreamwalker's True Name, the one they were born with and use whilst awake. Using a True Name, the target may be rendered powerless by an opponent, forcibly ejected from sleep and summoned against their will at the whims of their tormentor. For this reason, Dreamwalkers try to keep their True Name hidden whenever possible, and divulging it
to an ally is a potent act of trust.
Needs formatting... line breaks!

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Devoted Cendrens are further blessed by Kaimelea and become the Cendrenas, lords and ladies of the House. Cendrenas are rumoured to be able to use the collective memory of Aelyria to see not only learn what happened across the continent that previous brightening, but even cast their minds back eras into the past, as well as bestowing premonitive dreams into the minds of others and themselves.
I think you want either see or learn there?

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Nestadren: House of the Healer
The comforting words and soothing hands of House Nestadren are pillars that support the stability and peace of the Dreamscape. While most Dreamwalkers learn basic healing as part of their Dreamweaving ability, the effects are usually temporary and leave the Dreamwalker with crippling, invisible injuries when they awaken. It is the ministrations of the Nestadren that sooth these pains, and without them the Dreamscape would become a much more dangerous place for Kaimelean followers. Saying this, the Nestadren would be insulted if one assumed that physical healing was all they were capable of. In a world governed by the thoughts and dreams of others, the Nestadren pride themselves on their ability to heal and sooth the mind. Many who come seeking Kaimelea’s aid across Aelyria are sent to the Nestadren, who’s ability to comfort, sooth and heal the mind are unparalleled by any other House, some practitioners surpassing even mystics in their restorative abilities.
Should be whose

Love it love it love it!

Will do the rest of it later! Neeeeed bed! LOVE IT!
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